First Edit: Your Favorite Mug/I Didn't Mean To...

[Knot]

Hey Richard.

I Didn't Mean To...
There's not enough context/circumstances
in the piece currently for this title, I think.
(Perhaps: It Was an Accident)


Your mug hits the floor
- past tense?
like a fat skull.
- still think you need more detail here.
Who was holding the mug, was there
an argument, washing up, making coffee,
what?
The pieces large enough
that I can glue them-
- maybe it's a vernacular thing,
but for me this is missing
'back together' (or similar)
a man-made puzzle solved
for the rest of our lives.
I would cut these two lines
But there are delicate cracks
- add a bit more here; describe
the look, extent of the cracks,
that N cannot conceal them..?
you'll always know are there.
Shouldn't it be 'We will always...'?


Going in the right direction


Best, Knot.