Wedding night [title in progress]
#6
(06-07-2018, 01:39 AM)wapiti Wrote:  The blindfold of loneliness
Swept away on a June night
Our young and trusting eyes met
Love an unspoken whisper
 
Three springs turned yellow autumns 
Memories made as leaves fell,
Our lives and dreams became one
Whisper transformed to a shout
 
Passion, summer’s fruit we feast
Lives entwine like vines this night
Our families become one
The shout now a sacred vow
This is really fully fleshed and a very nice poem! I feel that are thing and themes you could expand on such as the "blindfold of loneliness Swept away on a June night". I find myself wanting to know more and see more images. Though it is great the poem is short and sweet. Anyways wanted to post and say that this one made my day thanks for the story!
Only one thing is impossible for God: To find any sense in any copyright law on the planet.
--mark twain
Bunx


Messages In This Thread
Wedding night [title in progress] - by wapiti - 06-07-2018, 01:39 AM
RE: Wedding night [title in progress] - by rowens - 06-07-2018, 03:24 AM
RE: Wedding night [title in progress] - by wapiti - 06-07-2018, 07:24 AM
RE: Wedding night [title in progress] - by rowens - 06-07-2018, 08:33 AM
RE: Wedding night [title in progress] - by Bunx - 06-09-2018, 08:05 AM



Users browsing this thread: 1 Guest(s)
Do NOT follow this link or you will be banned from the site!