Wedding night [title in progress]

[Radetof.Yahska]

The blindfold of loneliness
Swept away on a June night        // "swept away" seems to not work properly with "blindfold"
Our young and trusting eyes met
Love an unspoken whisper          // "unspoken" doesn't really make sense to me. What does this mean for the vow and the shout?
 
Three springs turned yellow autumns  // is yellow necessary here? There is no other allusion to colour, no contrast
Memories made as leaves fell,
Our lives and dreams became one
Whisper transformed to a shout   
 
Passion, summer’s fruit we feast         
Lives entwine like vines this night     //this is quite a mouthful, and the language here and in the preceding line is in stark contrast to what follows, in terms of volume (?)
Our families become one             
The shout now a sacred vow         //struggling with the last lines of each stanza. They seem a little forced.

There is a beautiful expression here, it just needs some mining. Please try and sit with it and see which words give when subjected to scrutiny, in the face of the theme.