Edit - After the Battle

[ellajam]

I like it, I think it's clear enough without the image and before the image I saw greensward as a field, I prefer that image. I'm surprised they are only required to remove the signs and can leave the trash posts. Some notes.

After the Battle


Six slim, straight yellow sticks I like knot's suggestion of shafts.
stood thrilling in bright greensward Maybe a comma here, as is it seems the yard applies to the greensward.
nearly cloth-yard long and none
quite vertical— as if
master archers had released
their like in volleys over fields, I'm on the fence on "their like" instead of "them", it reads wordy and the "as if" already says it.
these few having found no flesh nice line.
of horse or man, and so remained.

They seemed to stand
in pairs, and lacked for feathers maybe the comma after feathers instead of pairs.
having up to last Election Day
been spanned with advertising
posters for a mayoral or school board
candidate, which boys who stuck them there
have now removed on pain of law.

Better wars of votes than roses
or a hundred years, boys planting signs
than planting boys.

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This is an ekphrastic poem.  To view with the associated image, please see here.

This is poetry for me, a bigger thought inspired by the everyday scene, thanks for the read.