NaPM April 30, 2018
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(05-03-2018, 07:10 AM)Keith Wrote:  The Jesus factor

Not one of the bombs worked,
even the most complexed
went off like a cheap firework.

In the end it wasn't the owls,
it was the whales.
So many on the beaches
thousands more just off the coast,
they tried to warn us.

In the town a bell tower
haunts the magnolia streets
waiting for the stunt doubles to fall.
Camouflaged behind curtains
family's watch the stranger ride in
on a black horse.

Later a mother will swap
her eldest son,
for a tin of corned beef.
Keith, In the town a bell tower/haunts the magnolia streets. Lovely. Great title, great opening line. Like the apocalyptic four horseman type ending. Honest question (because I'm not familiar with all regional word choices) I've never heard complexed used as an adjective--I would use complex. Is that a regional thing? Not really critiquing just curious. Love this one, especially.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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NaPM April 30, 2018 - by Todd - 04-30-2018, 02:24 PM
RE: NaPM April 30, 2018 - by just mercedes - 04-30-2018, 02:26 PM
RE: NaPM April 30, 2018 - by just mercedes - 04-30-2018, 06:24 PM
RE: NaPM April 30, 2018 - by vagabond - 05-01-2018, 12:29 AM
RE: NaPM April 30, 2018 - by Knot - 04-30-2018, 10:45 PM
RE: NaPM April 30, 2018 - by Todd - 05-01-2018, 01:12 AM
RE: NaPM April 30, 2018 - by Tiger the Lion - 05-01-2018, 01:20 AM
RE: NaPM April 30, 2018 - by dukealien - 05-01-2018, 05:52 AM
RE: NaPM April 30, 2018 - by Richard - 05-01-2018, 09:00 AM
RE: NaPM April 30, 2018 - by Keith - 05-03-2018, 07:10 AM
RE: NaPM April 30, 2018 - by Todd - 05-03-2018, 02:35 PM
RE: NaPM April 30, 2018 - by Keith - 05-03-2018, 07:00 PM
RE: NaPM April 30, 2018 - by RiverNotch - 05-09-2018, 08:23 PM



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