Change (revised)

[Richard]

Hey wesliewilkin,
Welcome to the site

I like your overall idea here. However, I think you limit that idea by not going into enough detail in spots. I'll go into more detail below:

Hey guys! Any comments/suggestions are appreciated!

My mind is bursting with ideas,
My heart is overflowing with passion -I feel like you need to come up with an example for this passion. This is too much telling and not enough showing.
I cannot wait another minute,
I’ve got to put my thoughts into action. -The phrase "thoughts into action" is too close to a cliche for my liking. I would suggest rewording it.
 
Kids are being shot each day, -You need a specific example. If you named a country here where this is happening, this becomes a more effective image.
And the solution’s coming slow
I have hundreds of ideas on what we can do -You need to give the reader an idea of some of these ideas. Even if you picked one, and made it the focus of this stanza, that would be a help.
And I want everyone to know.
 
I have strong ideas on practically everything,
From gun control to our politicians -What about gun control or politicians? You need to be more specific here.
I want to be making a difference -I would suggest "make" instead of "making" because it sounds stronger.
I have so much mental ammunition.
 
But I’m stuck and I feel so useless, -Again, the phrase "I feel so useless" is too much telling and not enough showing. May be dress this up with a metaphor or some other literary device.
Too young to do much at all
I cannot stand to waste another minute,
Waiting for opportunity to call. -The phrase "opportunity to call" is to close to the cliche "waiting for opportunity to knock" for my liking, but if you're committed to it, why not extend it?
 
I know I’m still young, with my whole life ahead of me, -Is the repetition of "young" intentional?
And you might think it’s strange
But I’ve got to take action, I’m done sitting and waiting,
I’ve got to make a change -A specific example of something the speaker is going to change would be more effective than just saying they're going to make a change.

I realize this critique might seem a bit harsh, but if you were to go into more detail in the areas I've commented on, I think would would end up with much stronger piece.

Cheers,
Richard