When upon your heart my eyes did lay

[michellewareham]

When upon your heart my eyes did lay 
Hiding and feeble yet calling my name
Drawn to its beauty yet broken and sharp
Somehow you used it’s edges to sew up my heart

Blackened and battered by years inhumane 
Bruised by the heartless, by the sick and depraved
Beaten down by depression a cruel trick of fate
Wanting for love, yet filled with self-hate

But it’s not all I see when I look deep inside
I’m entranced by the beauty that you try to hide
I see a survivor, one depression can’t beat
Someone without whom I would be incomplete
I see kindness and compassion despite all you’ve been through
I’m not sure I’d still be like that if I were you

You took your broken and cared for my own
Walking this path no longer alone
Together we’ll face whatever in the future might lay
Darkest of night, or brightest of day
Stronger together, never to part
Ever since the moment my eyes first laid upon your heart

<<< lots of 'hard' rhymes' there... if you wanted to cut out bits and maybe give it some 'challenge' why not make it a shakespearean or Petrarchan sonnet? then you can make it less soppy, less cliché rhymes and let the form be the emotive tool?