soft laughter (ed)

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I wish you presented the notion of struggle and hardness vs softness (If I'm getting the gist of things) in a less arbitrary manner
something about your poem is too abstract for its own good.
So my critique will focus around being more direct, which also places your writing in the present tense 
Something to consider ~

soft laughter                                                                     
           
you reflect my attempts to be solid  simply replacing 'reflect' with  "are" seems to be a solution to the perplexity
       are
and my thin lips with a startled smile I like the idea of wavering under pressure, I just wish you connected more of this idea with the rest of the poem
to reply a collection of fluffy words; 'fluffy' isn't the best adjective, find a better way to encapsulate softness
a fitting sentence for indurating ideas 'fitting' seemed irrelevant to me, also can you elaborate on hardness vs softness?Also, this break didn't seem fitting so I got rid of it
then you come up implications of being down? it's a little confusing considering the context of anything prior
with a velvety scarf or a pink teddy bear I'm not quite sure what's going on here
and plush me down. this is fitting end, but it could be stronger