soft laughter (ed)

[Knot]

Hi vagabond.

when i attempt to be straight you reflect
You might want to reconsider 'straight'
(and break the sentence there) - go for
something more clearly antonymous
for 'soft'
my thin lips with a startled smile
'startled' is a bit jarring and doesn't seem to
fit with the actions of 'you'
and reply a collection of fluffy words;
'reply' is rather plain, why not 'proffer'
or similar?
a fitting sentence for induring ideas.
Gotta be irony here (?)
then you come up
'come up with' as in an idea, or an actual
offering?
with a velvety scarf or a pink teddy bear
would it still work is you substituted 'a'
with a comma?
and plush me down.
Really like the wordplay of the ending,
so many possibilities

Best, Knot.