Lumps in the Mousse

[abinuku]

The inferences of life's turbulence in the poem are clear, yet the source of the author's pain is not immediately apparent. Readers need more clues. One is left to assume "black" refers to race or culture. There is a temptation to see the word as a metaphor for pain, given references to "funerals" and "failures."  The  "white girl" in the last stanza brings readers back to some kind of commentary on race. You might add some sense of what "the black" does in the mix. Which "bits" are stuck? The link between "white girl" and "pack of cream" leaves a sense the message is incomplete.

Lumps in the Mousse

God added the black too quick
or failed to stir correctly.    
Most bits flow smooth,
some get stuck in the past.

(too many funerals this year,
too many failures this month)

He needs the blender
with the long blades.
I need another pack of cream:
a white girl who knows how to dance.