High Choice - edit2

[Lorvick]

High Choice


Two men ride bareback, unprotected- unprotected, meaning no harness?
high above a level polder - 
working manfully to fix- rather confident men, experienced? or carless?
a windmill-turbine generator. 

Geartrains rupture, safeties crack--- what safeties? 
blades whip, grease and insulation
blow black smoke,
a flaming halo traps the pair. -flaming halo reference divine intervention?

They hug, as men will in extremis. -not so manly anymore

Then one leaps for fear of burning 
and one burns for fear of falling. -my favorite lines of the poem, no right choice, fear wins 

Grace. -RIP

Inspired by somewhat garbled reports of an incident.  "---" for em dash (borrowed machine).

I think that I understand the message, I am rather new to writing poems... but it seems as if your message is, under pressure... people show you their true nature. Two men climb a tower with confidence and unprotected, then confronted with their fears, their true nature shines and their specific fears result in different deaths. I can come up with various images from this story, I don't know if that's what you intended... but it also can represent love between two men, when confronted with challenges... became overcome with relationship problems and went their separate ways guided by each of their fears. Either way, I like this poem... expansion of the poem can never hurt...but if you choose not to... its fine the way it is for me. good job