Second Edit: Ordinary
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H Richard.

A couple of queries that occured to me on readin this piece:

(03-07-2018, 10:23 PM)Richard Wrote:  First Edit:

Ordinary


There are old fears like Bela Lugosi's Why is this fear old, versus ...
threatening accent and strange clothes,
or the dread of sirens, head under desk-
a curse against those godless Reds.
Then there are timeless fears: a spider ... this fear - timeless?
tickling your leg until it bites,
heights that nauseate worse than sour milk. I don't understand  the use of'heights'
 here. I'm guessing 'heightened' fear is intended? Doesn't quite come through, for me.
There's courage too, usually arriving
at the worst time like your mother's uncle,
who smelled of garlic and could only talk
in the language of the old country. Loved this section.
Thanks for the chance to comment.

Cheers,

Frank
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Second Edit: Ordinary - by Richard - 03-07-2018, 10:23 PM
RE: Ordinary - by Tiger the Lion - 03-08-2018, 12:59 AM
RE: Ordinary - by Richard - 03-08-2018, 09:08 AM
RE: First Edit: Ordinary - by Knot - 03-09-2018, 03:14 AM
RE: First Edit: Ordinary - by Richard - 03-09-2018, 12:25 PM
RE: First Edit: Ordinary - by FP123 - 03-11-2018, 04:09 PM
RE: First Edit: Ordinary - by Richard - 03-12-2018, 09:33 PM
RE: First Edit: Ordinary - by Suzruth - 04-02-2018, 01:58 AM
RE: First Edit: Ordinary - by Richard - 04-02-2018, 08:51 AM
RE: First Edit: Ordinary - by danny_ - 04-03-2018, 11:26 PM
RE: First Edit: Ordinary - by Richard - 04-08-2018, 09:42 AM
RE: First Edit: Ordinary - by danny_ - 04-08-2018, 01:45 PM
RE: First Edit: Ordinary - by allisonkreid - 06-24-2018, 09:21 PM
RE: First Edit: Ordinary - by Richard - 06-25-2018, 01:53 AM
RE: Second Edit: Ordinary - by Richard - 06-26-2018, 09:27 AM



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