draft 5. edge of earth

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey Alex, This works pretty well for me. "Frolic" kinda kills it for me, but hey, it's only one word. I feel like you could trim some of the small words and have a rather evocative extended faux-haiku 

found the cottage 
 
evening firmament is 
peeled  from the dream, releasing 
a balmy breeze of afternoon  
that children frolic in,  chas(e)ing seagulls

Ya that's pretty sparse, take what suits your poem.
Paul