i didn´t understand the question (ed2)
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i didn´t understand the question                                                              (edit leanne, tiger, knot, FP123  +  title change)                                   

the old lady has alzheimer´s and she said
about seventy years ago there was a field
in czechoslovakia, maybe not only there
and not only then.
it might have grown wheat in summer
but one late autumn day
the earth produced hands,
digging to reach the sky
and its air -
then still.
she seems waiting for answers.





about the question

she had alzheimers, but the old lady once said
that about seventy years ago there was a field
in czechoslovakia, maybe not only then and not only there.
it might have produced grain in summer,
but one autumn day it grew a few arms,
digging to reach the sky
and its air -
then still.
and still she seems waiting for answers.
i can´t wait to share her dementia.
  mainly i´d like to know if content is clear enough and if it´s a bad idea to let the subject speak in the last line
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i didn´t understand the question (ed2) - by vagabond - 02-23-2018, 08:55 AM
RE: about the question - by Leanne - 02-23-2018, 09:02 AM
RE: about the question - by vagabond - 02-23-2018, 09:13 AM
RE: about the question (ed) - by Tiger the Lion - 02-23-2018, 09:48 AM
RE: about the question (ed) - by vagabond - 02-23-2018, 10:00 AM
RE: about the question (ed) - by TheCoyote - 02-23-2018, 07:24 PM
RE: about the question (ed) - by Knot - 02-24-2018, 04:34 AM
RE: about the question (ed) - by vagabond - 02-24-2018, 06:17 AM
RE: about the question (ed) - by Richard - 03-02-2018, 11:29 AM
RE: about the question (ed) - by FP123 - 03-07-2018, 07:42 PM



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