02-23-2018, 06:23 AM
(02-23-2018, 01:21 AM)Wjames Wrote: Cold gleaming silverNot to spoil anyone else's take/interpretation, only expose my own (ignorant) one...
imprints on the skin
above your heart.
Four years of iron
wither like a pick up
left to rust.
I see the badge and the service pistol - wives of policemen complain (including those who are officers themselves) about "always that iron between us." As musical accompaniment, something resembling "I walk the line."
But I could be utterly mistaken (g). Very good: the rhythm, which is perfect. Tiny suggestion: I'm reading "pickup" for "pick up," as in light truck.
Beautiful.
Non-practicing atheist

