Fences Against - Edit2

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Fences Against


Swimming pools
must have fences—
high, unclimbable
and eye-defeating—
not to shield from envy
but from children’s greed
for new territory
and Darwinian
self-extinction.

Swimming pools
must have fences—
high, unclimbable
and eye-defeating—
not to shield from envy
of a passer-by,
but from children’s greed
for new territory
and Darwinian
self-extinction.

This takes me somewhere, transports me and satisfies. I wonder if "daunting" might flow better than eye-defeating but thats a minor thing. Quite beautiful.