Sublime
#5
Hi Yimbus,

Thanks so much! I definitely see the problem with the first lines. I like nibbed's suggestion of saying "as the trees turned to gray", so I think that's the verdict. Thanks again.
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Sublime - by therabbitisme - 02-07-2018, 10:12 PM
RE: Sublime - by nibbed - 02-07-2018, 11:57 PM
RE: Sublime - by therabbitisme - 02-08-2018, 12:10 AM
RE: Sublime - by yimbus - 02-08-2018, 09:51 AM
RE: Sublime - by therabbitisme - 02-08-2018, 10:03 AM



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