02-08-2018, 12:10 AM
Hello nibbed,
Thanks for the comments. I like your suggestion on the tree line. The "black skin makes him mine" stanza is meant to discuss how color is literally only skin deep in some cases. I picked the word "sublime" because it sort of addresses things that are surreal in the absurdity of their reality. I feel this way about color, race, death, and cultural hierarchy. I juxtaposed a traditionally regal color with a slave's skin to put the oddness of social hierarchies into the perspective of the arbitrary yet brilliantly real nature of color.
I definitely see how this poem could be seen as divided, the pace transition is something I have to work on. Thanks again!
Thanks for the comments. I like your suggestion on the tree line. The "black skin makes him mine" stanza is meant to discuss how color is literally only skin deep in some cases. I picked the word "sublime" because it sort of addresses things that are surreal in the absurdity of their reality. I feel this way about color, race, death, and cultural hierarchy. I juxtaposed a traditionally regal color with a slave's skin to put the oddness of social hierarchies into the perspective of the arbitrary yet brilliantly real nature of color.
I definitely see how this poem could be seen as divided, the pace transition is something I have to work on. Thanks again!