A Stone in Fields of Green and Blue

[ritwiksadhu33]

Hi rabbit,
I liked reading this overall. Here are some thoughts.

Making knight moves on the kitchen tile
Fell I’ve been here for a while Very relatable for me
It’s snowing a bit, but not enough
For me to talk about it much While this extends the whole "nothing to do, nowhere to be" vibes, you're indoors, so this is hard to visualize, especially from inside the kitchen
I guess that I’ll just write it down
To read when nobody’s around
Poetry is sad enough
Sadder when you’re acting tough Again, painfully relatable 

Soon enough I’m sitting there
Flooded by torrential stares
Some are black, some crystal clear
Some with ever present tears No change of place has been conveyed, so here might work better in the first line. Also, the image of being flooded by stares, despite being clever, didn't really hit me. Maybe the traditional image of eyes flooded with tears is interfering with my cognition here
Two that stare inside of me
Though looking right beside of me No. like, i don't think these 2 lines work, for me. at all. Penetrating glances just don't fit into peripheral vision. like maybe a brief side glance that says i know all your secrets, but definitely not a stare
Leading me to fields unknown
And leaving me there all alone

Inhumane, these eyes that lead Adding "that" seems to make this paragraph an incomplete sentence. not that I'm complaining. Also, nothing has been added to make the eyes seem cruel: perhaps you are looking for the word inhuman.
Me to a place where I concede
That all my thoughts are yours alone
These eyes are yours that make me stone Freeze you? overwhelm you with emotions like fear and recognition and déjà vu?