Helen of Troy

[ritwiksadhu33]

Hi therabbitisme,
       A very clever and fun poem. Enjoyed reading this. Here are some thoughts

Helen was forged on Olympus’ peak
Her style and diction transcend all critique Interesting aside from the usual praise of her beauty. Don't know if you drew this from actual mythological description or invented it yourself, though.
Her Hera-esque hair strikes fear into men Why fear? Interestingly, this reminded me of Rilke's first elegy. Is it a reference?
Like Chronos, she crafts all the nows and the thens Interesting albeit cryptic description. I interpreted it as her appearance/personality being so striking that men are frozen as if timeless when they see her. Other better interpretations are possible too, I guess
A lane in the snow, a line in the sand Didn't get this. Is it something about her intelligence/beauty being beyond the tipping point or something? Probably not, that sounds stretched. Also, I'm assuming this is not a reference.
Ares and Apollo fight wars for her hand
Kingdoms and kings fall at her command Not quite at her command going by the usual tale. Of course, it's an almost mythological story with a different version for every author, so not complaining.
Her Persophonic voice brings crops to the land Persephonic, I think. Might be an acceptable variation though. Wouldn't know. Very interesting word choice - the word itself has a lot of nuances, and coupled with the story of Helen, and that it brings "crops to the land" instead of war (or after war?), this has a plethora of implications that I wouldn't bother to list.

Helen of Troy is mortal all the same
From the glow of her skin to the ring of her name
Her powers are those of the hearts that she moves
For in her they see all their self-written truths Image of perfection? Mirror for their flaws?
And on her they write, in the words that she speaks
“Helen was forged on Olympus’ peak” At first glance, this return to the first line seemed inane, but then I realized it insinuated that her reputation as a demigod was one created by men. Cleverly done, indeed.