Romantic Ideals (explicit language)

[Nabbit]

Sorry for necroing this.

I like how natural the couplets are, and the image is pretty funny but clear. 

I do think dutiful might be better than spelling it doodyful. It still gets the point across, but I don't get stuck on the funny spelling. 

The last line feels a slight bit redundant, or maybe too long, to me. I would prefer something like "That would be enough". Short but sweet.

Welcome to the site!

Thanks for the critique. I agree with you on doodyful, it is very forced. xD I was debating whether to go that route or stick with dutiful. The last line was written the way it was to rhyme with the first two.

Romantic Ideals 

If only I had a man so sweet
as the dog shit beneath my feet. A little iffy regarding the rhythm of "dog shit" -- I read it as a spondee, rather than the necessary iamb.

How long he'd cling to my sole
doodyful in his fervent hold Agreed with earlier notes that "dutiful" gets the point across. Also, missing punctuation, especially in a piece that's meant to make piss of serious things -- perhaps the glorious em dash?

that may be enough for me. The title doesn't quite nab me, either -- maybe something more scatological.

I'm really new to poetry. I don't know what spondee means and how to use punctuation in poetry. Do you know of any good resources that I can read online?

Thanks for the critique!