01-24-2018, 12:02 PM
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the medications listed out
in quantity and price
it doesn't say just who was served
whose cries prevented or incurred
how many of the pages numbered
off to blurry ends and eyes
reduced by me from aid to injury
reduced to numbers counting
all the dollars itemized and quoted
in each page and line and dot
i counted up their worth with marks
of what's and why's i counted up
and down and never added
- - -
Todd: Married Without Children - a concrete, secular parable - this poem "faithfully" fulfills the challenge
Tiger the Lion: short, sweet, perfect... the white space worked well
dukealien: "his qualities / faint traces, at the most, persist." so much in those eight words
Quixilated: "half my heart is a banana" i laughed; and the poem, such a genuine portrait
Lizzie on dukealien's poem: "What's compelling about this one for me is the speaker's ambivalence
toward the forgetting of sins. It's not the same as forgiveness."
Yes. The poem moved me, but I couldn't put it into words; you did.
Lizzie: "proposing marriage as God's solution / to the problem of loneliness."
"like intimacy is scarce / and you don't want to waste a single drop."
- an insightful essay in the brevity of a poem
RiverNotch: "a city rises in the wilderness / it smells like wet dog" - perfect Hemingway
Keith: Pan Head - and we're not just poets, some of us are "real writers"
CRNDLSM: "They didn't have a cow" -
vagabond: you cheated, you wrote a meta-answer... deviously clever
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions