In the Beginning

[Todd]

Hi Lizzie,

This was one of my favorites you did from NaPM. I don't have big issues with any of this. A few comments below:

In the beginning, there was construction paper.--Just going with the Genesis narrative you could separate the construction paper into colors or do some other sort of division (separating the firmament and such)
The children said, let us cut it into shapes:--Love the whimsy in this strophe and the us (of a sort of trinity though the number isn't mentioned"
triangles for alligator teeth,
ovals for panda tongues,
rectangles for orangutan feet. --All solid choices that children might make.

Color and water seeped into the paper,
while the crafter's sand remained
on the surface.

There were sequins, buttons,
pom poms and pipe cleaners--
all separated from each other
according to size and hue.
And the children longed
to end their loneliness,
the disconnection between elements.--I think I'd consider ending this strophe on loneliness (the impetus for creation and the strongest word). I think you can incorporate this last line by simply replacing "separated" above with "disconnected" Just a thought

So, the children said, let there be glue,
enough to cover the whole earth.--love the over-the-top nature and abundance of their creative steps
We will join the trees–-
paper shapes to table, cabinets,--not sure if you need paper shapes anymore. It does help lead us but to the children I'm sure they are already thinking of them as simply trees.
floor, and baseboard. It is not good--like the nod back to Adam and Eve. I think ending on alone on the next line also works better with loneliness at the end of the previous strophe (sort of a problem/solution setup), 
for them to be alone.

And we will bind humans together into one:
hand to hair, fingertip to palm--sticky--very visual fun line
like us. One likeness for each child.--a twist on the image bearing idea 

Then they said, let us cover our creations
in glitter. They saw that it was good,
and reveled in their creations without rest.--Solid ending and I like where you chose to leave it. There is no Sabbath when your work is play.

Much enjoyed this one.

Best,

Todd