Fences Against

Fences Against - Edit2

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01-19-2018, 05:54 AM

I actually like the use of 'self-extinction' as a great way to describe the way kids are. I really love those last four lines. I do agree with Knot that I'm not sure line 6 is doing you any favors. Not sure if it needs a rewrite or just needs to be cut.

Lovely work.

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Fences Against - Edit2 - by dukealien - 01-18-2018, 12:32 AM

RE: Fences Against - by Knot - 01-18-2018, 04:57 AM

RE: Fences Against - by Hannah - 01-19-2018, 05:54 AM

RE: Fences Against - by just mercedes - 01-19-2018, 07:05 AM

RE: Fences Against - Edit - by dukealien - 01-21-2018, 07:03 AM

RE: Fences Against - Edit - by Lizzie - 01-22-2018, 11:51 AM

RE: Fences Against - Edit - by Rave - 02-09-2018, 09:31 PM

RE: Fences Against - Edit2 - by dukealien - 02-11-2018, 05:56 AM

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