1-18-18

[Tiger the Lion]

This works well for me, bitter cold and scary, the last line an eyeopener, full of both the movement of time and responsibility.

One point you might think about: "in" may be a little weak, there may be a word to describe the wind's effect better but for me the poem as is is satisfying and complete.

Good morning, , thanks for posting it.

January wind
in every crack and crevice 
we let between us

Thanks Ella, and good morning. I had originally considered "finds" or "fills" in place of "in". I felt like "in" implied the action more subtly, It's already a departure from 'standard haiku'. I decided too much action took it further away.
Paul