01-09-2018, 02:46 PM
I liked the old version better... it was less refined but had more emotion and feeling behind it.
your poem is about being so filled with emotion you have trouble expressing yourself, putting it to paper. it doesn't do it justice.
your revision looks nicer... but it lost some of the meaning along the way. i only got an idea of what it was after reading the original.
original needs work... but don't lose your voice along the way. =[
your poem is about being so filled with emotion you have trouble expressing yourself, putting it to paper. it doesn't do it justice.
your revision looks nicer... but it lost some of the meaning along the way. i only got an idea of what it was after reading the original.
original needs work... but don't lose your voice along the way. =[