She
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I like it. It's a very relatable piece and overall well written. Only suggestion I have is too rework the "Is it still considered pain when hurt is everyday?" line. It's a good line itself but I feel like it could be better placed in the poem or maybe that line could be expanded to make it feel more natural.
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She - by chopblock - 12-24-2017, 02:35 PM
RE: She - by ellajam - 12-24-2017, 09:11 PM
RE: She - by Richard - 12-25-2017, 12:00 AM
RE: She - by ADUnser - 12-31-2017, 12:35 PM
RE: She - by AttnAttack - 12-31-2017, 01:53 PM
RE: She - by Estefanie.V - 01-17-2018, 03:10 AM
RE: She - by moot - 01-23-2018, 04:52 PM
RE: She - by yimbus - 01-26-2018, 12:56 PM



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