Verdunt

[dukealien]

In the Meadows where our bodies lay
Between the vicious thorns of blackberries
We hid and danced and ran so far away
When the clouds had read our histories

And when the rain restores the Life we burnt
I'll show you love in a handful of dirt.

In basic critique, but also considering the author's related work ("Verdant") in For Fun.

First suggestion is to remove all capitalization except as required by grammar, that is, proper names and first word of a sentence.  In part this is just the fashion on this site, but emphasis by placing words at the focus of a line (first or last word, for example) rather than capitalization may be worth pursuing.

Good use of white space after L4, which would only be helped by not capitalizing the first word of L5.

Another suggestion is to place each use of the word "the" under suspicion and ruthlessly remove it unless it refers to the sole and only example of what it refers to (the Pope, but not the priest).  The following is an example of what could result from applying these two suggestions to your first stanza, NOT a rewrite:

In meadows where our bodies lay
pricked raw by thorny blackberries,
we hid and danced, and ran away
when clouds had read our histories.

(At first I didn't like rhyming "blackberries" with "histories," but it grows on one.  In the end, I do like it.)

You might consider treating the final couplet in the same way:  removing "the" can make a line more concise, or alternatively leave a spare foot or two to be shod with descriptive words.  This could also make it possible to rhyme that couplet or conform its rhythm to the first stanza.

You have an interesting concept here, which will repay editing and a search for improving words.

On a personal note, I picture Verdun as hills (overlooking the French lines)  with some woods (before the artillery reduced them to matchsticks and craters); meadows would be more the Somme.  Perhaps a battlefield could be suggested in the body rather than relying on the title.  Just a thought.