Rhyme on a Short Skirt on Dancefloor
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I believe the poem would be stronger if the last line evoked a feeling of beauty that the woman expelled. This would make the "but stupid" a bit more shocking coming after a word like "gorgeous, beautiful, jaw-dropping, or show stopping". 

"Yes, you’re fairly nice looking, but stupid."
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RE: Rhyme on a Short Skirt on Dancefloor - by Joseph918 - 12-21-2017, 05:26 PM
RE: Rhyme on a Short Skirt on Dancefloor - by chopblock - 12-24-2017, 01:35 PM



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