those who will (1st edit)

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Hello Janine. I see a few words you might consider cutting. Also, would prefer "needing" to "needin'" - just me.

there's a cross-eyed girl
caught up in her own maelstrom
who is needin' prayer

Paul

Thank you, Paul
I may have to use some of your suggestions
they certainly are more befitting to short form.


-nibbed