12-16-2017, 02:31 AM
The following are not poetic in my opinion.
'Please remain seated"
"Please step away from the door
this train is about to depart"
"Please move your bags aside"
They could have been replaced by descriptions which indirectly will convey the picture to the reader.
We always rush to convey our hot thoughts and skip basic needs. It's very "prose" I believe and that's why I will not go deeper.
The following is magnetizing, either if it is fully understood or not.
"standing waves of moving places"
Good lack
'Please remain seated"
"Please step away from the door
this train is about to depart"
"Please move your bags aside"
They could have been replaced by descriptions which indirectly will convey the picture to the reader.
We always rush to convey our hot thoughts and skip basic needs. It's very "prose" I believe and that's why I will not go deeper.
The following is magnetizing, either if it is fully understood or not.
"standing waves of moving places"
Good lack