Constellations

Constellations

Lavieboheme
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12-15-2017, 08:59 AM

I like the image your are portaiying. If it was me (but what do i know) id probably try to make it a bit shorter or more to the point, i felt a bit lost in time here. And maybe the critic about syllables would be a good start also. Good luck. Its beautiful.

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Constellations - by Dcandy925 - 09-12-2017, 01:49 PM

RE: Constellations - by Achebe - 09-12-2017, 02:43 PM

RE: Constellations - by billy - 09-12-2017, 04:09 PM

RE: Constellations - by ClaireLou - 09-15-2017, 07:34 PM

RE: Constellations - by JMannUK - 09-16-2017, 05:15 AM

RE: Constellations - by Mopkins - 12-08-2017, 10:03 PM

RE: Constellations - by illuminations - 12-10-2017, 03:15 AM

RE: Constellations - by sarahfrance - 12-13-2017, 04:24 AM

RE: Constellations - by __rat__ - 12-13-2017, 06:02 PM

RE: Constellations - by PoetryWheel - 12-14-2017, 03:52 AM

RE: Constellations - by Lavieboheme - 12-15-2017, 08:59 AM

RE: Constellations - by elektric_timewarp - 01-02-2018, 10:39 PM

RE: Constellations - by moot - 01-22-2018, 05:17 PM

RE: Constellations - by moot - 01-23-2018, 04:45 PM

RE: Constellations - by yimbus - 01-26-2018, 12:31 PM

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