Pleading With an Ibid's Hem (formerly The Golden Bullet), edit 1

Pleading With an Ibid's Hem (formerly The Golden Bullet), edit 1

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#13

12-12-2017, 09:50 AM

So, this is probably thin commentary for mild, but I think declaring it a dream (especially right off the bat) ruins the whole. It produces an eye roll and an “oh well” from your audience. How much stronger would it be if you trusted your reader?

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Pleading With an Ibid's Hem (formerly The Golden Bullet), edit 1 - by Lizzie - 12-09-2017, 04:14 AM

RE: The Golden Bullet - by ellajam - 12-09-2017, 05:15 AM

RE: The Golden Bullet - by nibbed - 12-09-2017, 04:05 PM

RE: The Golden Bullet - by Knot - 12-09-2017, 10:47 PM

RE: The Golden Bullet - by vagabond - 12-10-2017, 02:52 AM

RE: The Golden Bullet - by KYPunk - 12-10-2017, 08:39 AM

RE: The Golden Bullet - by Lizzie - 12-11-2017, 01:15 PM

RE: Pleading With an Ibid's Hem (formerly The Golden Bullet), edit 1 - by Lizzie - 12-11-2017, 10:54 PM

RE: Pleading With an Ibid's Hem (formerly The Golden Bullet), edit 1 - by Tiger the Lion - 12-11-2017, 11:19 PM

RE: Pleading With an Ibid's Hem (formerly The Golden Bullet), edit 1 - by Lizzie - 12-15-2017, 02:14 AM