sea glass
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Oooooo, I like the revision. Specifically, I appreciate the turn in L8 to address the reader directly. I like expanding the use of sound -- a nice subversion of the expected reliance on the visual. Also a nice setup for the contrast in the last line with muted.

Cool beans. Thumbsup
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sea glass - by vagabond - 12-10-2017, 06:46 AM
RE: sea glass - by Leanne - 12-10-2017, 08:25 AM
RE: sea glass - by vagabond - 12-10-2017, 09:23 PM
RE: sea glass - by shemthepenman - 12-10-2017, 12:24 PM
RE: sea glass - by Keith - 12-10-2017, 08:04 PM
RE: sea glass - by Leanne - 12-11-2017, 04:17 AM
RE: sea glass - by vagabond - 12-11-2017, 04:59 AM
RE: sea glass - by Lizzie - 12-11-2017, 06:27 AM
RE: sea glass - by nibbed - 12-11-2017, 11:30 AM
RE: sea glass - by vagabond - 12-11-2017, 09:43 PM
RE: sea glass - by Lizzie - 12-11-2017, 10:35 PM



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