12-11-2017, 06:27 AM
It is a lovely piece, Vaga. The only line that's a miss for me is L4 -- did the motives fail or did the actions fail the motives? I'd reword it for clarity.
I like the idea of shared poetry. We all riff off each other anyway -- no poetry comes to life in a vacuum.
Thanks for sharing,
Lizzie
I like the idea of shared poetry. We all riff off each other anyway -- no poetry comes to life in a vacuum.
Thanks for sharing,
Lizzie

