Learned behavior

[Keith]

OOOWWWWUUUUUHHHHH food glorious food! fanks fine fellow!!
She stood in front of the pram
repeatedly smacking
into an unseen cry. (gee 'into' is a bit weird for me... i'd generally say 'smacking an/a/her'  or such but neato bit of alliterative ppeees and kkkks and mmms tbh)
Greasy hair and dirty clothes (yawnish greasy and dirty/ a more descriptive euphemism would a bit of mercy to this stern scene)
her body moved in a way
that hinted at issues
and sheltered housing.(ooooh veeery niiice descriptives)

No eye contact or opinion,
he was somewhere else
shrinking into the shopping center,  (looooveee shirnking/shopping/centre  kkks ssses)
watching the automatic doors
in crisis. (i sort of wondering whether he was pacing/blinking/jerking around in association with this crisis? it's add a bit of movement to this procedural march)

I caught her hand
holding on at the wrist, (like a wee brat  heroic  hhhahhches)
she came back from behind her eyes, (eyes spinning like the exorcist?)
a sail boat emerging from a storm.

Its nappy was full
clothes covered in sick,
how could I explain what a child needs
to a mother that needed the same? (crunchy cynical closure)

neato bit of pedestrian intervention thanks u get the good cit award today

Hey Momomopkins
Thank you for the feedback, I take your point about greasy hair....etc not working hard enough, I will take a look, into the pram was my intention and the reason I chose the word but I can see your point so will have a think. Much appreciated. Keith