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At dusk
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12-05-2017, 11:19 PM
(12-05-2017, 09:57 PM)bogpan Wrote: At duskconsider "bending/ towards the ground" so you might get rid of "they are fading away", which is too clear an explanation in my opinion. light should be plural. the last line needs a proof or simply the statement that no one wants to be.
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RE: At dusk - by Mopkins - 12-05-2017, 11:07 PM
RE: At dusk - by vagabond - 12-05-2017, 11:19 PM
RE: At dusk - by bogpan - 12-06-2017, 04:08 AM
RE: At dusk - by vagabond - 12-06-2017, 05:04 AM
RE: At dusk - by Mopkins - 12-06-2017, 06:16 AM
RE: At dusk - by nibbed - 12-06-2017, 08:34 AM
RE: At dusk - by bogpan - 12-07-2017, 05:16 AM
RE: At dusk - by nibbed - 12-08-2017, 04:17 PM
RE: At dusk - by moot - 02-26-2018, 02:44 AM
RE: At dusk - by Lorvick - 03-08-2018, 11:06 AM
RE: At dusk - by kenzlee_poetry - 04-24-2018, 02:48 PM
RE: At dusk - by moanlisa - 06-24-2018, 09:55 AM
RE: At dusk - by piggate - 07-17-2018, 05:49 AM
RE: At dusk - by Fae - 08-15-2018, 09:37 AM
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