12-04-2017, 01:03 AM
Hey Richard.
I'm not too convinced by this version I'm afraid, particularly L3.
For me it simply doesn't flow as well as earlier versions, and
the title seems less relevant.
Just a suggestion:
windows frosted,
the door closed
and a light left on.
darkness watches,
snow silent as loneliness;
it is only the wind that knocks.
Best, Knot.
I'm not too convinced by this version I'm afraid, particularly L3.
For me it simply doesn't flow as well as earlier versions, and
the title seems less relevant.
Just a suggestion:
windows frosted,
the door closed
and a light left on.
darkness watches,
snow silent as loneliness;
it is only the wind that knocks.
Best, Knot.