The End of the World 0.01

[Brownlie]

The End of the World


God must have spilled his box of paints today, --Maybe cut out some prepositions here. 
I think, I'm fooled by the dream into believing -- Do you need to put a comma after the word think?
the end of the world is nigh: the cloudy yellow sunset
an ash plume or a mushroom cloud, -- Do you need an ash plume and a mushroom cloud?
then the sky a rainbow, pastel
blues and pinks and golds
dusted with white stars,
two little silver cups
for moons, a red sun
always setting yet never hiding,
last a comet, a long cloudy stream of milk
turn suddenly vapor -- I'd woken up
only to fall asleep again.

Liked this poem. If you want to edit, maybe delete some prepositions to make it more concise.