The Death Of (insert your name here) ism.
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This is pretty great,  there are a few spots that trip me up 

(11-24-2017, 06:54 PM)Mopkins Wrote:  The Death Of (insert your name here) ism.
 
Can you be a cult-buster if you’ve got no cult of your own?
If you can’t spin them a better yarn, do they want to be left alone?cause by spinning a better yarn, you'e trying to convince them to leave the cult, but the question isn't about being alone, its about not being bothered about  it
So many footsteps on the paths, everyone practicing isms,
so many paths within the paths, but once off-track they’re schisms? Prolly better as a statement, nstead of a question
 
No-one believes in anything but their own beliefs confirmed, 
too lazy to even make them up, they’re easily sold and burned not sure about this easily sold business
by any old story neatly put and a nicely marketed Boss… burned by a story and a boss I think could make clearer sense“Just give me a nice congregation and somewhere to wear my gold cross.
 
Give me a text I can toss about, give me a prayer to say.
Give me a ritual to boast about, give me a slogan to wave.”
Nobody wants an unfathomed God, nor a Faith that is undocumented
Nobody laughs at the Emperor’s clothes lest the others might think him demented. Others might think the emperor or the nobody is demented?
I like the use of nobody twice here, and no-one once earlier
 
Everything’s path  if God’s everywhere, there isn’t a place you can tread if it isn't possessive, id say everything is
where He isn’t, so why must we stay on some path like God is far off and ahead? This enjambment between these two lines though interesting throw me off rhythm 
“Catch Him up later, read this book, learn this theology.”
You can’t have a personal relationship with someone’s biography! I like this line
But that’s what comes to replace it while you study the new position
locating the God that is everywhere while you carefully kill your own ism. Love the last line, carefully for real! 
Thanks for the read!
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RE: The Death Of (insert your name here) ism. - by CRNDLSM - 11-26-2017, 01:53 PM



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