First Edit: Legacy

First Edit: Legacy

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11-26-2017, 09:46 AM

I like this, I don't ming changing wind, to me it conjures thoughts of society evolving, things moving in a new direction.

I think it would be a little stonger if you change the opening simile to a metaphor by cutting "like", though.

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First Edit: Legacy - by Richard - 11-23-2017, 02:17 PM

RE: Legacy - by Keith - 11-24-2017, 03:43 AM

RE: Legacy - by Richard - 11-24-2017, 12:04 PM

RE: Legacy - by nibbed - 11-25-2017, 04:07 PM

RE: First Edit: Legacy - by Richard - 11-26-2017, 04:13 AM

RE: First Edit: Legacy - by vagabond - 11-26-2017, 06:21 AM

RE: First Edit: Legacy - by Richard - 11-26-2017, 08:22 AM

RE: First Edit: Legacy - by Wjames - 11-26-2017, 09:46 AM

RE: First Edit: Legacy - by Richard - 11-26-2017, 11:23 AM

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