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A Sense of Discomfort
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11-17-2017, 08:01 AM
I really love the images you use. A few other people have mentioned punctuation. I like it as is but it just might be interesting to see what how punctuating the sentences changes the way it reads. Maybe you will end up not liking it, but it might be worth experimenting with the ways you can direct the reader through punctuation.
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A Sense of Discomfort - by cloud - 10-01-2017, 03:11 PM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by dukealien - 10-01-2017, 10:14 PM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by Wastrel - 10-02-2017, 02:57 AM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by Richard - 10-02-2017, 04:02 AM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by Huckleberry - 10-02-2017, 05:30 PM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by ClaireLou - 10-03-2017, 09:22 PM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by Youi - 10-04-2017, 11:43 AM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by silentseas - 10-16-2017, 10:11 AM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by illya_v - 10-17-2017, 04:54 AM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by Ineedadrinkor2or3 - 10-17-2017, 10:44 AM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by QDeathstar - 11-12-2017, 10:45 PM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by Persadia - 11-13-2017, 02:39 AM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by tony3 - 11-17-2017, 07:18 AM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by Hannah - 11-17-2017, 08:01 AM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by Thomas Sanders - 11-23-2017, 12:54 PM
RE: A Sense of Discomfort - by PondWater - 11-26-2017, 10:48 PM
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