The Girl in the Mirror

[Richard]

Hey Lydish,
I like the tone here. I do have some thoughts though:

Dear china-girl, 
I met you in an alleyway 
when your despondency soaked the sheets, -For some reason I just can't wrap my head around this. Is this some sort of reference to sweat? I'm probably missing something.
salted the air.
The scent sprawled out like a painting -I like this simile, and wonder if you could expand upon it a bit. What colour is the painting?
“draw me like one of your french girls” -May be put this in italics to solve some of the grammar issues with this line.
except for the fact that I could see
the hills rolling down your body.
At least cover yourself in sheets. -Is the repetition of "sheets" intentional?
Disgusting; -I wonder if you need this line. The reader gets that the speaker is disgusted, so I don't think it needs to be said directly.
I left and
never looked back.
You are the mirror I cracked -I quite like this metaphor. It shows the speaker's self-loathing nicely.
when I showered
until my skin blistered
and the hair splintered from my scalp. -These three lines effectively convey how disgusted the speaker truly is.
I abandoned you.
But you were reborn
into my shadow. -Strong image. I would suggest ending on this and cutting the next two lines.
Is this your revenge?
China-girl let go.

Overall, I think you have a nice first draft here, and I look forward to seeing where you take this piece from here.

Cheers,
Richard