11-16-2017, 06:23 AM
(11-16-2017, 02:58 AM)homer1950 Wrote: reading this poem i think of the movie "bird man" and how the bible quote destroys him.
Quote:Oh' to be a bird and fly! why the apostrophe?
freedom,
soaring above mortal toil everyone is mortal.. from the moment we were born, the lucky ones make it to the statistical life expectancy. freedom has nothing to do with that. toil is ever-present, was from the stone ages, you want food, go out and hunt. it´s the mechanisms of modern life that converted "toil" into something despicable that may or may not have sense anymore.
fleeing in altitudes-
the gravity of the mundane gravity of the mundane.. i think in a postmodern society the "mundane" is not grave enough to keep us on the ground. which has a good side and a bad side. so i guess i don´t quite get what you want to express with this phrase, is it really the mundane that causes this "gravity"?
escaping the grinding down
of a measured life though i (think i) get your idea you might replace that with a more specific image.. i am not sure it fits to the topic, let me (as a reader) see what you mean.
what chance of flight now so the above mentioned escape is abandoned
thirty five summers sounds like an early midlife crisis
then consumed of dust
Pslam 39:4
LORD, make me to know mine end,
and the measure of my days,
what it is; that I may know how frail I am. it stands there, like a recommendation to wait for better times or an afterlife - so offensive that your poem actually makes me want to fight against that. so, all in all, good topic. i probably interpreted it in a way you didn´t intend, but that´s not important
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