11-16-2017, 04:37 AM
Halo, alexorande-
Plasticity
[A moment becomes damp and gray
between my fingers. My hands begin
to mold] colors, and sounds are carved -[good description of clay in hands, though sounds made me think of something musical]
or scored into [and attached with slip] -[you lost me here]
if it all fits a metaphor, or
a [shady sculptor sculpts] for me. -[this seemed to be a good metaphor for manipulation]
I am catching parts of the poem but am trying to piece together how it all fits, clearly.
In one moment I thought about a sculptor, then a fall, then manipulation, then writing
poetry. Plasticity made me think of something suggestive or adaptable or maybe even, fake?
-nibbed
Plasticity
[A moment becomes damp and gray
between my fingers. My hands begin
to mold] colors, and sounds are carved -[good description of clay in hands, though sounds made me think of something musical]
or scored into [and attached with slip] -[you lost me here]
if it all fits a metaphor, or
a [shady sculptor sculpts] for me. -[this seemed to be a good metaphor for manipulation]
I am catching parts of the poem but am trying to piece together how it all fits, clearly.
In one moment I thought about a sculptor, then a fall, then manipulation, then writing
poetry. Plasticity made me think of something suggestive or adaptable or maybe even, fake?
-nibbed
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