Delia

[paperbagprincess]

This is a really beautiful poem. The message was clear all throughout. I loved the rhyming pattern and it stayed effective the whole way through. The first verse was rather confusing at first but upon further reading it became clear. You very clearly convey the conflict the protagonist is having with themselves. Also in the second verse where it says "You wage your tail, yours eyes are bright," I would assume that "wage" was intended to in-fact be wag. Apart from that I also found some confusion within the "your eyes are bright". If the dog was sick then would it's eyes be bright? Later on I decided that this was there to play a part in the conflict.
Overall the techniques used in this poem all go together so well and you make it seem so effortless. You have much talent and I hope to see more of your writing in the future.