11-13-2017, 09:49 AM
(10-12-2017, 07:43 PM)Huckleberry Wrote: It was not the brightest morning,HI Huckleberry,
Not a day to play in the field,
You’re a bit sick, you’ll soon be healed,
Not to worry! just a warning.
Come to see you, all is so sad,
You wage your tail, yours eyes are bright,
Behind that spark I feel a fight,
Not to worry? I’m going mad.
You lay down, head in my hand,
Your velvet ear fits like a glove,
In one look can be so much love,
You’re so brave, should I take a stand?
I hate myself, still get a lick,
But stuck like a bear in a trap,
Tell you “Let’s take a little nap.”
And the vet played his dirty trick.
This poem is beautiful.
I can feel your sadness, and how torn you are at having your loving dog put down because he was sick.
I can feel his ear in my own hand when I read L10.
I too wonder if "wage" is meant to be "Wag". It's a bit distracting, but if "wage" is what you had in mind, it requires a bit deeper thinking on my part.
The last 3 lines say to me that you feel panic, fear, anger, regret or remorse about the decision.
Very well done.
Persadia
"Everything's a metaphor"
Everything's a metaphor
"People don't know what to do with you when you are not trying to assimilate" Gabrielle Union
"People don't know what to do with you when you are not trying to assimilate" Gabrielle Union

