Angels Tossed Last Christmas

Angels Tossed Last Christmas

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#10

11-13-2017, 06:50 AM

I like “ruts of thickened mud” - it’s a strong sensory image
You need to have a few more of those in the poem instead of generalities like “hurt my soul”
If you do that, then it’ll improve the poem greatly

~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe

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Angels Tossed Last Christmas - by nibbed - 11-09-2017, 01:20 PM

RE: Sometime Last Christmas - by Knot - 11-10-2017, 04:58 AM

RE: Sometime Last Christmas - by nibbed - 11-12-2017, 06:51 AM

RE: Sometime Last Christmas - by 71degrees - 11-12-2017, 01:37 PM

RE: Sometime Last Christmas - by nibbed - 11-12-2017, 01:51 PM

RE: Sometime Last Christmas - by 71degrees - 11-10-2017, 05:42 AM

RE: Angels Tossed Last Christmas - by Achebe - 11-12-2017, 03:09 PM

RE: Angels Tossed Last Christmas - by nibbed - 11-12-2017, 03:26 PM

RE: Angels Tossed Last Christmas - by vagabond - 11-12-2017, 10:09 PM

RE: Angels Tossed Last Christmas - by Achebe - 11-13-2017, 06:50 AM

RE: Angels Tossed Last Christmas - by nibbed - 11-13-2017, 09:46 AM

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