Or Else
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Hi 71 degrees
I was perplexed at the last stanza.


If living were only a word
rather than a reason, every                          not sure you need rather than a reason
one would simply throw it
away

Cupid breathed on me                                  I like that Cupid's breath shows sensitivity regarding love.
once and I was blown glass,                          can do with or without once, maybe
pulled down-blue-see through                       confused a bit by the hyphens, unless it relates to the art
and hand shaped                                         

If there really is a God
and one day he calls me,
I will simply walk around
for a while and hope
he moves on to someone
or else                                                           I wondered about the calling what it represented: refusing service or running from death,
                                                                     regardless, the ending was effective.
there's always a better reason to love
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Messages In This Thread
Or Else - by 71degrees - 11-10-2017, 05:43 AM
RE: Or Else - by alonso ramoran - 11-10-2017, 08:10 AM
RE: Or Else - by 71degrees - 11-12-2017, 01:41 PM
RE: Or Else - by Achebe - 11-10-2017, 08:16 AM
RE: Or Else - by QDeathstar - 11-10-2017, 08:44 AM
RE: Or Else - by Knot - 11-10-2017, 11:57 PM
RE: Or Else - by nibbed - 11-11-2017, 06:18 AM
RE: Or Else - by vagabond - 11-12-2017, 10:27 PM
RE: Or Else - by QDeathstar - 11-12-2017, 10:33 PM



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