11-10-2017, 11:57 PM
Hi 71degrees
Enjoyed this, particularly S2.
A couple of suggestions:
If living were only a word
rather than a reason,
everyone would
simply throw it away
Cupid breathed on me once
and I was blown glass,
pulled down-blue-see through
not quite sure about the hyphen placements.
and hand shaped
Is this shaped as a hand, or hand crafted?
If God one day he calls me,
I will simply walk around
for a while and hope
he moves on to someone else
Afraid I don't get the 'or else' ending.
Best, Knot
Enjoyed this, particularly S2.
A couple of suggestions:
If living were only a word
rather than a reason,
everyone would
simply throw it away
Cupid breathed on me once
and I was blown glass,
pulled down-blue-see through
not quite sure about the hyphen placements.
and hand shaped
Is this shaped as a hand, or hand crafted?
If God one day he calls me,
I will simply walk around
for a while and hope
he moves on to someone else
Afraid I don't get the 'or else' ending.
Best, Knot